‘Here Comes the Ripper’

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As a follow up, and capturing an essential part of the poet’s persona, Rachel Schine channeled “asshole Mutanabbi, thinking he’s the lion (hence in the lion’s voice):
I’ve no Chesire’s
Winsome smirk
I bare my teeth
To set to work. Hamid Ouyachi took some liberties with vocabulary to make a colorful quilt:
When I flash my ivory at you
Just know
I am not making friends –
ever saw a lion smile at a doe? Steeds, nights and badlands
Blade, spear
Vellum and reed
Are the friends I know. Believe me, that’s not a grin! And Alex Rowell gave a nod to the constellations:
Should Leo put his fangs on show
He’s not smiling (you should know)
Joe Bradford took us back to 1990s rap:
When you see this lion’s teeth shining,
It’s like Rakim said: “Nobody’s smiling.”
And if anyone didn’t catch al-Mutanabbi’s gist, Mahmoud Khalifa spells it out for us:
If the lion bares its fangs, be warned; it is not smiling. My friends are my steed, and this waste, and the night,
My paper and pen, and my spear and my sword. Just to remind you of the texts:

 
If you see the lion’s fangs bared,
don’t assume the lion is smiling! Buthaina Al Nasiri conveys all the gravity:
Horses, know me well, so do the night and wasteland,
And the sword, the spear, the parchment and pen. It’s no smile, my lord.  
2. While connectinghamza grins through the translation:
If you see a lion grinning,
It’s time to start running! Arberry)

 
Some participants, such as Hanan Nasser (@hanannasser), chose to focus on one line:
When the lion bears his fangs
That is not a smile you see
Or Deema (@HummusChoseMe), who turned the line into a triplet with a strong finish:
Lion’s fangs glimmer
You smile in return, but
Here comes the ripper
Abgadhawaz also made a triplet, drawing it out with vivid imagery and diction:
Steeds and the night and wild blighted expanse
All know my mettle: the metal of lance
And sword, the steel of writing pen and word
Huda Abubaker Shalabi drew out the dire warning of al-Mutanabbi’s line:
A lion will bare its teeth
Dare not to be fooled
That is no smile he is flashing you
And Tuve Floden gave us some euphonic alliteration:
Steeds, night, the desert
Indeed, they know me
Like spear and sabre
Or pen and paper
Meanwhile, Thearabicpages took a decidedly casual route:
Cat’s canines out not in? [Instructions to a dental veterinarian]:
When seeing to a lion’s teeth
Do not be dazzled by his enamel. The deaf start to hear by the strength of my word. My poems bring sight to the eyes of the blind. cummings:
Lion fangs think
don’t think smiling
think death. xxx
Horses, night and the desert know me well. xxx
When he saw me coming for him,
He bared his teeth in not quite a grin. ***
In a horse night
on a desert sword
pen is spear
paper knows my –
@PressTaras sent two entries, the second being another hip-hop reference and going along with several visually-inflected versions:
 
1. *If you have thoughts about the next shape this translation challenge should take, please get in touch. Kevin Blankinship is an assistant professor at Brigham Young University. As do swords and spears,
Parchment and inkwell. I thought instantly of e.e. Alexander Key’s free verse drives rhythm, syntax, and sense right to the edge of their capacity. ‘Here Comes the Ripper’

ArabLit hosted our seventh — and final* —   edition of the Arabic Translation Challenge starting June 23, 2020:
By Kevin Blankinship
“Time to run for dear life because you are his lunch.”
Thanks to everyone for supporting the Arabic Translation Challenge! **
Beholding me facing up to fight
He bared his teeth in a grimace
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If a Lion’s bared fangs, you behold,
Don’t take it for a grin. Other participants took on all three verses. For some well-known and pretty straightforward lines of Arabic poetry, I was amazed yet again by the range and creativity of responses this week. We’ll be back soon, promise. In other words: it is time to run for dear life because you are his lunch. Aidan Kaplan went for rhyme and meter, with a high register reminiscent of another century:
When you see that the lion is showing his teeth,
You must not be fooled. [Instructions from a gentle veteran]:
When seeing to an enemy on the battlefield
He may grin; we must bear it. When he beheld me come down
in the field against him,
he bared his back teeth [nawaajidh]
and not in a grin, I may say   (trans. ***
I was down to kill
he saw me mouth
agape molars on
show not smiling
death.